D U S K by Mikimoto Angel

This is the poem I made for my boyfriend Ciovic. His former band created a tune out of this, but I haven't heard of it yet. Tell me what you think about it.

Heads raised on a vast expanse above
Steaming sensation rushing endlessly within
The breeze blazing this intimate existence
Stars gleam- revealing what needs to be hidden.

Stuck halfway across the world- both stayed
Hands slowly creeping to feel the undying warmth
Glances blurting out the flaming passion disguised
Elemental foes around them- they despised.

His whisper so gentle seemed to kiss her cheeks
Eventually giving in to what the heart seeks
Its heavy beating stirred their emotions
Striking them with this burning attraction.

A gaze they dwelt silently in each other's eyes
Losing all sense of time instead
A light steps out to give glory to eternity
The flickering star says something they could see

Then silence stretched between them
A breath is what keeping them apart
However, this gap never did last long
All of a sudden, his lips caressed hers.

My eyes laid on how the night sky exude romance
I felt the rhythm of their heartbeat
Stumbled upon the remnants of what I had,
Will they bade farewell or meet the new horizon?